ok well.... im pretty sure about the topic and stuff and im trying to start writing it in my sleepless nights.... (with little to show for it as of yet.)
well anyhoot.... you told me we have to do leaflet sorta thing so i worked on that... so look over it, but thats not my real question.....

war has always brought us new technologies. Whether they are flops or hits, each war has given us great breakthroughs in science. The question is, How far will war take us... "Warp Drives," "Anti-matter Generators," "Super conductors," and beyond... However what happens when war goes to far. When it takes us faster down the technology route than our culture can adapt.
Many people believe we expanded to quickly, and blame the scientists for rushing us out into space before the human race was ready.. And for that see the Merak war as the scientists' fault.
David, a new comer to the science academy, is one such scientist blamed for the war, even though he was barely born when it started. David, now nearly 20, has lost everyone to the war: his father, a medical officer on a outer colony was killed within the first 5 years. His mother a terran trader was caught off guard and blown out of the sky 10 years ago, and his 2 brothers were lost when the pera-min shipyards were destroyed 5 months ago. It is understandable that David would seek revenge for this unprovoked war.
David now is deticated to ending the war the only way he knows how... through the power of numbers and science...

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My real question is about my Intro... Like I told you I real want to copy your style from orphans quest and have a very confusing thing at the beging that wont make sense untill nearly the end... and I'm considering redoing it... because I don't like using the names of 2 of the major characters.... (and If your good at quessing I think you can even see something else....) anyhoot.... I suppose inorder to get good feedback you need atleast something about it.... um david is a reasercher doing top secret stuff (planetary bombardment...) and is working on superpowerful bombs (not to give stuff away ill say what type in code.... we were talking about it the other day during one of our science conversations... when i was talking about my asperations in life) anyhoot... the earth has unified and is more a totalitarian government and as the intro says.... there is a big war.... and the government is getting desperate...
ok well thats enough to cover the storyline without giving things away... so without further ado...(ado...???)
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"David... We have to start the test... NOW!" Captain Ethan Albright demanded.
David paused and looked down to the command and control area sunk into the floor. Again Ethan demanded "David... They are breaking through the lines... we only have eight more guard carriers... We must launch NOW!" David, in pure anguish noded his head... "Do it... punch it in for a 208 blast 1... and fire..." Ethan gave the final command, and the person at the weapons counsel punched in some buttons at his station, and a small red blob was launched from the ship. Now david raised his head and looked at the viewer, as most of the bridge crew stood to watch the test. The tactical officer screamed out "14 seconds till impact..." Ethan walked over to David and put his hand on his shoulder in an attempt to comfort him. David looked at the hand and put space between Ethan and himself. The weapons officer began a countdown at 5 seconds to impact. Now all the bridge crew, except for the the one maning tactical stood up and watched the veiwers. "3....... 2......1......" Tactical called out... Just as he called out 1, there was a blinding flash of light.
"Weapon te...s.....t........ w....a....s......s.....u......c.........."